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Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan for future, its more important to focus on present. Do you agree or disagree?

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Musing on and planning about
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future
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the future
 are some of the most pleasurable mental activities one can perform. Whereas, some argue that
this
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 is of no avail. Though the level of
planning we
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planning, we
 are comfortable with is a personal preference, but I assume that thinking and planning about
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future
Suggestion
the future
 is one of the cardinal rules for success.
To begin
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 with,
paramount importance
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the paramount importance
 in achieving success, is the functionality of
human’s subconscious mind
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the human’s subconscious mind
.
For instance
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, forethought assists anticipating problems and seek
way
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a way
 out rather than tackling them all of a sudden. Once a target for
future
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 is set, it follows the path that would lead to the achievement of those objectives.
Hence
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, individuals who plan ahead of time, are better equipped to deal with the curve balls that life throws at them than their counterparts who choose to live in the moment.
Moreover
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, creating a master plan for the times ahead encourages a person to save money for investment in
future
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 projects
such
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 as their business goals or their children’s education. To support my statement, perfect example would be buying a house
,
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,
 most people cannot just do
this
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spontaneously but
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spontaneously, but
 put in several years for saving and preparing. To conclude with, a person’s mind without a thorough plan would be derailed from the track that would lead to the realization of their dreams.
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, the optimal performance of
subconscious mind
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the subconscious mind
 when working towards a goal and
ability
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the ability
 to deal with unforeseeable events is not the waste of time.
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