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Nowadays people live in the society where consumer goods are relatively cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Gone were the days, when only wealthy people can afford to buy electronics and new clothes every other month, but with the disposable income everyone can buy nowadays. In recent times consumer goods are easily affordable.
This
 essay will discuss does its merits outweigh demerits. To embark on, a decade ago due to limited resources as well as income hardly everyone can buy the consumer goods only rich people can afford it. To illustrate, 10 years ago wealthy people has the phone and electronic gadgets, but still they can't change it as often as they now can even after a month or so.
For example
, a study shows that now every 2nd house in the world has smartphones and t.
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 their home.
Thus
, cheaper consumer good has made somehow everyone equal in
this
 social status and made peoples' life easy as communication is being made easy now anyone can talk with each even at distant.
Although
, cheap goods
has brought
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have brought
 lots of benefits, but still it has great impact on the environment with the disposable income and the arrival of new gadgets everyday has a bad impact on the atmosphere.
For instance
, every month there is a new arrival of product hits the market, which makes the people buy more and which create the problem of landfills everywhere. After a certain period these resources will diminish if we will not take care of
this
 thing now.
Therefore
, excessive production lead to more litter. In a nutshell, cheap goods are a beneficial bit to some extent we must stop producing unnecessary goods and consumptions as it is causing great damage to earth
otherwise
 it will be too late.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • quality of life
  • overconsumption
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable practices
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • decline in quality
  • frequent replacements
  • standard of living
  • mass production
  • cheap labor
  • working conditions
  • exploitation
  • innovation
  • cost-effective
  • competitive
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