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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Day by day the overweight issue is increasing with gives bad effect on a body's daily life. Overweight is highly a poor impact to the society because as the customer grows up the body affects the personality which is the biggest complication. We are facing many energy factors which create an obstacle to the society and for that we should plan a diet chart.The well-being issue is not only finding in the youngsters or in adults, but
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 in the middle aged people and 50 plus years people. The main question arises from overweight is asthma, breathing headache, etc. The life who is over the diet as per the age is not able to work hard in life and not able to maintain the proper energy condition. As per humanity, they thought that they give guidance related to vulgar in regular curriculum so that they gain the knowledge regarding the power and weight dilemma. Regular exercise is the key factor to lose the weight like running, yoga, walk, etc. The torso should always focus on the diesel they should not eat the fatty food, avoid the oily things and fast food. The youngsters must focus on their durability so that they are able to work hard. Healthy diet maintain's proper conditions of the frame through which they create camping for the awareness of the health and the overweight system for the humanity. Posters and banners must pasted in the surroundings so that they always get a reminder regarding
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