The constitution of many countries states that people are the only source of power. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Have you participated in politics in any way?

I think that, no matter who the leader of the
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, he
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is, he
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or she should be, most importantly, educated,
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patriots
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of the
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,
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professionals
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, healthy, both physically and mentally and decent. I think that these qualities should be with the leaders of the
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, since they
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shape
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the future of the
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and provide
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whole
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. And yet,
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, I think that in Kazakhstan they trust a man more
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I don’t know, maybe
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a mentality of the
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. If you ask a question to our peasants
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way: what qualities are most valued in a woman? Men answer: "housekeeping."
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,
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have a place primarily in the house, in the family. I'm not saying that
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is the case with everyone, but it is a fact that someone has it. But I think that
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have the right to be leaders of the
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(Allah forbid)
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there is a war in the
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, many
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say that
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cannot cope with
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task. Since they are so tender by birth, in a word, war is not for them. They say that
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, even if they are patriots, do not know how to use military weapons. In these cases, some
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do not support
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to become the
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leaders
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of the
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.
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, some
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believe that the government needs more
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leaders in politics to reduce violence. Perhaps
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correct, as
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will pay special attention to the topic of violence. Since most of the
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country
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there are
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cases. And always underage little girls. I think we need to resolve
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issue globally. In the end, I
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want to say, as she said, whoever the leader would be, they should be patriots
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and educated. From the point of view of the possibility of management and responsibility for the
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and for
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, the requirements cannot differ by gender principles.

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clarity
Be clear about your view at the start. State if you agree or partly agree with the idea that people are the source of power.
organization
Make one main idea in each paragraph and give one or two examples for each.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Break long sentences into clear parts.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'therefore'.
expansion
When you give examples, explain how they back your point.
accuracy
Check grammar and fix small mistakes so the meaning is clear.
content
You raise good points about education, patriotism, and equal rights for women.
content
You use real examples from life to show a view.
analysis
You think about how rules should be fair to all people, not by sex.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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