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Intelligence is the most important quality for a leader. Do you agree or disagree?

A leader is a person who leads by example and gets the job done.
While
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intelligent
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 is an important virtue for a person to lead, there are
other many
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 equally
omnipotent
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important
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 traits he must possess. In
this
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essay
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 I will elaborate my view with the help of examples.
To begin
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 with, a leader must be able to motivate
his
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their
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 juniors.
This
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 is because a motivated staff is a good breeding ground
of
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 innovative ideas.
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,
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a few
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 encouraging words from a boss can help relieve
employee
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an employee
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 from stress and meet his deadline.
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, the organisation prospers, which augurs well for everyone concerned. If a superior fails to motivate his juniors, it will result in low work efficiency.
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, the person in command should keep the lines of communication open between
him
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himself
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 and his team.
This
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 is very important because it encourages staff to come up with and discuss their problems at
workplace
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the workplace
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 openly and frankly with him.
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, I was on the verge of resigning from my job
due to
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 a problem with a co-worker, but when I discussed the matter with my boss, the whole matter was resolved amicably.
This
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 not only gave me immense job satisfaction, but
also
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 helped foster
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 relationship with my co-worker later on. In conclusion, I would reiterate my opinion that a leader should possess
range
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a range
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 of personality traits
such
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 as honesty, leading by example,
problem-resolving
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problem-solving
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 skills, credibility
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etc.
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 to lead
his
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their
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 team effectively.

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Task Response
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and summarize it in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear linking words to connect your ideas better, like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
Task Response
Add another example or more details to support your main points.
Task Achievement
You have good examples that illustrate your points well.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are relevant to the topic and you provide solid reasoning.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informed decisions
  • complex problems
  • anticipate
  • emotional intelligence
  • connect with others
  • inspire
  • manage conflicts
  • wisdom
  • integrity
  • execute ideas
  • empathy
  • resilience
  • motivate
  • unite
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