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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, life has been pretty hectic, resulting in many people living in modernized societies have eaten fast foods as their main meals. Personally, I would argue that
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 trend has more drawbacks than benefits. On the one hand, in modernized societies fast
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 restaurants are very trendy. As they are found in any streets easily and
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 have reasonable prices, people tend to buy snacks
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 of spending
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 on cooking foods.
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, nowadays, every family members spend the majority of their
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 outside and they come back home at late night,
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, they do not have enough
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 to cook.
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, buying a meal from a fast
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 establishment takes less than hour, whereas, cooking a
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 meal at home needs more than an hour.
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 meals taste delicious, they are high in carbohydrate, fat, and calories. In modern countries like the USA, the vast number of individuals suffer from obesity. Because
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 nation is very popular for various cuisine chains, thereby, the Americans orders their main meals at fast restaurants rather than cooking at home, which results in gaining weight.
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, Fast foods can
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 change our lifestyle.
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, as these kinds of meals will be ready in a least
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 leading people to being less patient. If
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 lifestyle remains trendy, people may not improve their cooking skill and lose
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 delightful experience in their life. To conclude,
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 fast
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 meals make life easier for people in these hectic days, I believe that the disadvantage of these meals outweighs their benefits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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