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Some might argue, that

air

travel

is causing major harm to the environment in the matter of burning a tremendous amount of fossil

fuel

each year and depleting the world oil reserve, and demand that it should be limited.

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it's irrefutable that flying jets cause damage to the environment, I,

however

, firmly disagree that it is beneficial to minimize the number of flights or restrict them.

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essay addresses the reasons behind my opposition. One significant reason to support my claim is that many government's economies depend solely on the income provided by the tourism sector which is vitally

depended

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the

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air

travel

. For

further

elaboration, in a country

such

as Egypt tourism industry generate more than 5 billion U.S. Dollars annually and provide more than 2 million job, naturally most of the tourists if not all come through airports, since you

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travel

across continents in mere hours and it has become more and more convenient means of

travel

nowadays, so it will impact the economy in a destructive manner if

air

travel

was to be restricted or banned in any way. In fact, it will increase the unemployment rate exponentially,

Therefore

, it's really impractical

economy wise

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to tackle

this

concerning issue Another reason in favour of my opinion

that

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many environmentalists have proven that

air

travel

is rather friendly to the environment in comparison to other means of transportation.

additionally

, ground and maritime transportation means producing more than triple carbon dioxide emissions and

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way more fossil

fuel

than

air

travel

As a result

, it's quite trivial to even think

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making any reparations in the

air

travel

sector before addressing the largest carbon emitters which are far more concerning to tackle. In conclusion, even if the flight schedule globally could be minimized somehow, it is not a viable or

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long term

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solution to tackle fossil

fuel

depletion or carbon dioxide emissions.

Moreover

scientist

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must find a fossil

fuel

replacement in the near future.

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

329 words

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