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FOR SCHOOL CHILDREN THEIR TEACHERS HAVE MOE INFLUENCE ON THEIR INTELLIGENCE AND SOCIAL DEVELOPMENT THAN THEIR PARENTS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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In the social and mental development of school-going
children their
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children, their
 teachers and parents have serious impacts. It is highly disputed of whose influence is more on their intellectual level. It is thought by some people that teachers contribute much more to the child's development than his family. In my opinion,
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teachers' position
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the teachers' position
teachers' positions
 and instruments are crucial, it cannot outrace the
parents
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parents'
parent's
 role in terms of the intellectual advancement of their children. In
modern era
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the modern era
, school-goings
has been spending
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have been spending
have spent
 more than a half of their day in the educational institutes.
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 results
in
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from
 the interaction between the teacher and the child to be more often and maybe deeper than the child's immediate circle.
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, the teaching settings are designed to improve the students' intelligence through educating
them especially
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them, especially
 in the fields of mathematics and science.
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, play groups are created in kindergartens in order for the young ones to socialize by playing with each other.
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 beneficial education is done by a professional teaching team. Thereby, teachers play a vital part in the
childrens'
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Childrens'
 lives. A survey conducted suggests that more than 40 percent of the young-aged men and women has indicated that they learnt most of the knowledge
on
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of
 life from their school teachers as their household have to go to work daily and came home tired.
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, the parents have an undeniable influence on their offspring's intelligence. Before enrolling
to
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in
 the school, children are always
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 to their family who show them the distinction of the right and wrong and play games for hours. All these actions are carried out
spesifically
in distinction from others
specifically
 for the children's improvement. In conclusion, the children are influenced by their school teachers as well as home teachers which are their parents in honing their certain skills. Despite teachers have
advantegous
giving an advantage
advantageous
 effects on improving the youth socially and intellectually it is an
undisputable
not open to question; obviously true
indisputable
 fact that parents play a more crucial role in bringing up their loved-ones and developing their important social and mind related skills.
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