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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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 is one of the topics that has affected human life in the
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 decades. It has changed the way we work, do shopping or the way we talk to our friends. While it has improved certain aspects of our lives, I think it has
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 had several negative effects. One of the biggest drawbacks of the
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technology
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 is that reduces communication and interaction between people. The human being is no longer used to having social relationship, because he can buy or do everything he wants without lifting a finger. It is true that there are some people that prefer spending a lot of time sitting at their computer
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 of going out.
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, there is a strong
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 which says that spending more than three hours a day, especially with the children, watching a screen, can have a detrimental effect. In spite of having several drawbacks, we can’t deny that
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 is an invaluable resource. It has made many aspects of our life more enjoyable and easier.
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 of all, we all can use the internet to be in touch with other people. It can help us to make new friends or just to have some
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 from other people.
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,
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 can help all of us to work or study. There is a huge amount of
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 that can be found on the internet.
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, a person from Spain can have knowledge of the political strategies of the U.S. In a minute. From my point of view, there are some negative aspects of IT, but it depends on how you use it. People should never overuse internet and should pay more attention of their physical activities. Having said that, the benefits outweigh overwhelmingly the disadvantages.
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