The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
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The line graphs illustrate data about monthly expenditure on
Childs
sports by Britain guardians and how many kids participate in three different games held between Change the noun form
child
between
2008 to 2014.
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Overall
, the amount of money increases with the passage of time. Football
has a greater number of participants than athlete
and swimming games. There is some fluctuation seen in Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
football
and athlete while
swimming has steadily increased in peak.
The guardians start spending with
20 Change preposition
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pounds
monthly on their child in 2008, reaching to
25 Change preposition
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pounds
per month at the end
of the year 2010. Onward on
2011 the amount was still becoming elevated and crosses almost 30 Change preposition
in
pounds
. In 2014 per month sport
fee was more than 30 Change the noun form
sports
pounds
.
The numbers of children in 2008 in swimming and athlete were less than 2.5 million, while
the
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football
was above 7.5 million. As the
time Correct article usage
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pass
, there was Replace the word
passed
slightly
rising in numbers in a Correct article usage
a slightly
football
game
with half or one million same with Fix the agreement mistake
games
case
of swimmers, Add an article
the case
on the other
hand
a dramatic rise is observed in athletes almost Add a comma
,hand
double
in numbers Wrong verb form
doubling
at the end
of time.Submitted by sheen.pharmacist on
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