Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Crime today has become one of the most important issues in society. While some believe that putting criminals in jail is the best solution, others think providing them with education and vocational programs is better.
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I accept that they should receive job training and educational programs, I disagree that there is no need to bring criminals to prison. On the one hand, vocational programs and training are
good
Suggestion
better
methods that can be used to help criminals become better citizens.
Firstly
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, education can change the attitude of wrongdoers positively. When educated, criminals will be aware that they should have not broken the law and they
also
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feel guilty of their wrongdoings.
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, vocational training can give offenders a chance to know more clearly about some jobs
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as tailor, carpenter so that they can find
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jobs when being released from jail. Because of lacking money, many people commit crimes and become criminals like theft or robbery so providing vocational training can help them earn a living after they are free.
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,
this
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may lead to the reduction of the rate of crime committing. On the other side, incarcerating criminals is an obviously good measure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegration
  • Vocational training
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Correctional facilities
  • Reformative justice
  • Social reentry
  • Ex-offender
  • Criminal justice system
  • Restorative practices
  • Penal system
  • Social marginalization
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