The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this

In the era of globalization, where we live in. Since
21st century
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the 21st century
, life has been converted into
virtual one
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virtual ones
a virtual one
the virtual one
. Obviously, time-consuming jobs can be accomplished
such
as online education is existed on the net. As rose has thorn, surfing the net is being caused to kill valuable time, especially among
young generation
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the young generation
. People can no longer restrict
theirselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
on sitting in front of smart phones and laptops over much
time except
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time, except
that teenagers always put too much emphasize on social
networkings
an interconnected system of things or people
networks
such
as
instagram
,
tegram
a message transmitted by telegraph
telegram
and twitter.
Consequently
, they are keeping in touch with unknown people so that many children have
began
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begun
to behave badly towards their parents. Both views will be overseen with lots of details. Looking back 19th and 20th century, learning was quite hard and uncomfortable.
Therefore
, the majority of people had been remained less educated.
Nevertheless
, nowadays, by the net students are on the way attending e-lessons without any
uncomforts
because a lot of programs as Zoom, online conference and
imo
are used to take part in each lesson.
Consequently
, population can be witnessed
safety namely
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safety, namely
they do not need to pay
extra prize
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the extra price
the extra prize
and time
on
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for
taxi and who never exhaust as opposed to bygone days.
For instance
, as
pandemic
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the pandemic
a pandemic
is widespread over the world, all inhabitants require to exploit the net
otherwise
, they no longer join lessons and watch breaking news on a daily basis.
On the other hand
, it
is drown
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has drowned
an
anology
an inference that if things agree in some respects they probably agree in others
analogy
between internet and knife. Namely, the knife may be utilized to both advantageous and disadvantageous sides. Axiomatically, some children as well as teenagers are using the net wrongly because as they are enthusiast, who wonder to do all
thing
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things
as much as they can. To illustrate,
young generation
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the younger generation
younger generation
can not isolate harm and kindness into 2 sides
besides
that they are mostly engrossed in contact with bad ethical peers. At the moment, the majority of teenagers are requesting independence from their parents,
as a
result some
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result, some
of them have decided not to obey roles of their parents. In conclusion,
outbreak
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the outbreak
of the net is the most vital for all ways and lots of teachers would be unemployed unless the net was not submitted to the world.
Moreover
, all of students have a chance
on
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in
their hands to attends e-lessons except that teenagers can prepare
theirselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
for upcoming
universities
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university
university's
exams,
otherwise
they can no longer perform anything

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