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Nowadays,families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.why is this happening?do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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• Busy more
time
 for children • Nuclear family money not a problem • No
rapport
a written document describing the findings of some individual or group
report
 In society today, the role of families has changed drastically. It is evident that people have become used
with
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to
this
 situation. The drawbacks have outweighed the advantages of living in
such
 a manner.
This
 essay will discuss
first
 the busy life, nuclear family and the loss of rapport inside families. At the same
time
, it will
also
 discuss how small families mean more quality
time
 and better finances.
To begin
 with, demanding life of a nuclear
family both
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family, both
 the parents are working rapport with other family members very less and everybody seems to be their life. In other others, due to domestic relationship socializing with other family peoples very less and the value of connection not as much of
somearlier
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For instance
,
some
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Some
 youngsters leave their family in the early ages to study elsewhere
.
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.
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At
 the
time
time
 passes those peoples
becomes
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become
 emotionally alienated from their
family
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families
.
That is
 why

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