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I am a 27-year-old graduate student, who
is
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is also working
has also worked
also
 work as a research assistant in the department of Constitutional Law in a state university in Istanbul. I am studying in Public Law, and I am interested in Constitutional Law, International Law and Human Rights Law. My master thesis focuses on the Examination of the Discrimination based on Sexual Orientation in the case-law of
ECtHR
an Old Testament book telling of a beautiful Jewess who became queen of Persia and saved her people from massacre
Esther
 and Turkish Supreme Court. I have a knowledge of English and
an
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a
 basic knowledge of French. I have started to learn French when I attended an exchange programme in Liege. I almost came up to Level B1 in French when I was there, but
unfortunetly
by bad luck
unfortunately
 I was unable to focus on it later as much as I did when I was in Belgium. I liked Belgium, especially Brussels, and I promised myself that if I could, I would live in Belgium again for a while. I see Brussels as a vibrant, multicultural city literally located in the heart of the Europe. The possibility of seeing people from different cultures together, hearing different languages together attracts me a lot. I like to spend my spare times watching films. I can call myself as a film enthusiastic, and I am
big fan
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a big fan
 of Jean-Pierre and Luc Dardenne.
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, I like Herge as a cartoonist. I used to read
TinTin
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Tin Tin
 books with a pleasure. When I was in Liege, I had the chance to collect some of
second
-hand
originial
preceding all others in time or being as first made or performed
original
TinTin
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Tin Tin
 books, and I was
also
 able to buy a piece of
plane model
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the plane model
plane models
 from a
TinTin
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Tin Tin
 book, that still sits in my small library at a very reasonable price. As I mentioned before, I am currently working as a research assistant in the department of Constitutional Law in a state university in Istanbul, and I aim to pursue an academic career, and I believe that the more different experiences I have, the more qualified I will be as an academician, as a human.

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