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chart compares the major exports of Southland in 2000

chart compares the major exports of Southland in 2000
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The chart compares the major exports of Southland in 2000,20 and estimates these figures for 2025. As we can see from the left section, the liquidity coming from international tourism has increased from about eight
billion
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euros
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 in 2000, to nearly nine
billion
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. Another one-
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 rise is forecasted for the year 2025 in international tourism. The dairy
products’
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products
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 exportations have soared from nearly under seven
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euros
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 in 2000, to approximately 10
billion
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 currently.
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, it is forecasted that these figures will experience a drop with an extent of half a
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euros
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 in 2025. Eventually, meat products projections have already shown a decrease from six
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 to about five and a half
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euros
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 in 2000 and 2020, respectively. The meat
products’
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products
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 exports are
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 expected to
further
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 experience a drop to a figure of five
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euros
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 in 2025. In general,
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 chart shows that exports in industries like international tourism have been growing
with
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 a steady pace and are probably going to follow a similar trend, whilst they are showing an opposite pattern for consumerism-related industries like meat products.
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