Children who are brought up in families that do no have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is considered by some that children of deprived families are well
preapred
made ready or fit or suitable beforehand
prepared
to confront any kind of difficulties in their future in
camparison
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
to children of
affulent
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
affluent
families. Personally speaking,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely disagree with the given point of view because money is not
only factor
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the only factor
which make us able to handle difficulties in life.
To begin
with, there are many factors to go against
this
view.
Firstly
, it is certainly true that money plays
a
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an
imperative role
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