In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

In today's cutting-edge period, a large number of modern population thinks that
government
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the government
have
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has
to levy a higher
tax
for fast
food
whereas many others do not support
this
opinion. Personally, I totally agree that higher rate of
tax
will be useful for
society both
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society, both
financial
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financially
and healthy
way
and
this
essay includes some reasons. To start with, higher rate of
tax
have
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has
to levy by fast
food
companies,
as a result
, it will be useful for some people's
health
due to junk
food
has several
harm
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harms
for
health
. Some
health
diseases are caused by junk
food
and it is possible to reduce the place of fast
food
in
public's
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public
life by higher charge. United States
is
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are
prime example
,
Accept space
,
most of Americans tend to buy junk
food
, they avoid wasting their time by
this
way
because cooking at home takes time. But fast
food
impact to their
health
,
for example
, obesity is a basic problem in America now and it is a fact that many other diseases as
raspiratory
pertaining to respiration
respiratory
and kidney
diseaseas
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disease as
are caused by unhealthy fast
food
. Another issue is of levying
higher
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higher taxes
a higher tax
tax
on fast
food
is that it can contribute by financial
way
, a money which is levied could use for youngs education or in
medicine
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a medicine way
way
.
Moreover
, increasing taxes will raise
price
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the price
of fast
food
and
this
will cause to reduce of
consuptions
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
because it is too expensive,
as a result
, if people who consume
this
type of
food
ocassionally
now and then or here and there
occasionally
,
this
can help to
public's
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the public's health
health
.
Furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
, if cost of fast
food
raise that it will be expensive for most of people and
that is
why only a bit part of society can purchase it. In conclusion, a government should impose higher
tax
on fast
food
companies and educational or medicine system might improve by
this
money and large number of consumptions could reduce due to higher cost
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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