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The Growth of online Shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The suffusion of technology in everyday life is transforming human preferences; the most visible change is the shifting shopping patterns of individuals from conventional brick and mortar stores to online mediums. There is no doubt that the new trend is gaining popularity among the masses; especially in young generation. Several people deem that in the near future online shopping will supplant all other modes of shopping, resulting, in a worldwide closure of malls and shopping centres. As per my standpoint, the volume of the online trade will definitely increase many folds due to its convenience, but the notion of its complete capturing of the market transactions is preposterous. The primary reason that e-commerce cannot replace the local stores is the fact that these websites cannot provide physical verification of products before purchase. Evidently, a myriad of people still feels hesitant to buy goods,
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 expensive items, from online platforms.
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, in many cases it has been observed that people do not get the same product as promised by the website,
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, dwindle its credibility among customers.
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, payment against online purchases are mostly made through debit, credit cards or other electronic methods, which are prone to cyber attacks from hackers. The danger of losing private information and financial loss is the prominent risk associated with the online purchases.
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, criminals use different tactics to obtain personal information about customers
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 as creating fake websites on which huge discounts are offered to bait customers. For
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 reason, a plethora of people still prefer cash transactions and avoid online shopping as much as possible. Taking everything into account, there is no doubt that the scale of online shopping will increase over the course of time and it will open new vistas for business to promote their products.
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, factors attached to online shopping
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 as unable to verify the products physically, counterfeit products are sold as original and potential risk of cybercrime impedes its complete dominance, henceforth, still make shopping centres, malls and stores an important place of attraction for customers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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