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Research shows business meetings and business trainings are done online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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According to the research, most
business
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 relationships are done via
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internet
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the internet
. While I accept that online system is lucrative for
business
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 owners and
internet
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 holders, I believe that abundant of employees might be dismissed from their works. In the era of technology, most of the daily chores are done through
internet
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, as well as businesses. On my presumption, supervisors of the companies make profits, whereas labours go under, because there are many people who are doing customer services. To take an example, the company should be managed by guards, managers, cleaners and secretaries with an
acrimony
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acrimonious
 by the director. While doing online
business
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 trainings and meetings, they might lose their jobs, unless they find new occupations, ones' loved ones cannot be subsidized.
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, it brings absence of food, shelter and educational needs.
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, from a lucrative perspective,
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 system saves time, which means at the same time individuals accustom to do extra activities and they become adamant on their purposes. Another view is that
business
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 holders save the money from labour wages, taxes and fuel
costs those
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costs, those
 are used for company, because
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 cost has acme all over the costs. Online
business
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 trainings are accessible to save a video from the process, and it can be helpful when the people are stuck
at
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in
 the abnormal positions, because a video from the training can be paused where it is necessitated.
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,
this
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 system can be widespread and the owner of
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 idea can make a profit. To conclude,
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 owners must think about the situations of the employees' when they want to run a
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 via
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internet
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the internet
an internet
, albeit they earn more money.

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