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Limited money should be spend on computer equipment or good teachers. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #computer #equipment #teachers
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It is crucial to consider that how the expenditure in education should be. Whether
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 limited amount of
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 should be spent on high quality teachers or on computer technology in
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. In my view, nowadays, balance of both of them are important for students’ future prospects. In
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side
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sides
 of the arguments and present my opinion in
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the conclusion
. To start with, the technologies these days are changing and developing rapidly. In order to adapt themselves with these hi-techs, the students have to have some hand-on training of it.
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, the children who are not trained on computer machines and do not know the fundamental of them, in future they might feel their knowledge obsolete.
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, it is imminent that in future most of the professions will be based on
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 technologies in some way or another.
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,
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 should contemplate
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spending
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 in computer equipments, so that, students can learn those skills as well.
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, one cannot neglect the importance of good mentors in education
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. Tutors are helpful in many aspects
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of
 adolescence; they not only provide high-quality
education but
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education, but
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 guide them through their career. If these instructors will not be there in schools,
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, it would be inevitable that students will get
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. To illustrate
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, when a student
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makes
 mistakes, his/her examiner not only show him how to correct those
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mistakes, but
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 motivate him to not repeat
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 mistakes again.
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, it is equally important to spend limited
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 on good
tutors
a session of intensive tuition given by a tutor to an individual or to a small number of students
tutorials
 as well. To conclude,
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 technologies
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 as computers are essential for educational purposes to keep up with the trend,
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, good efficiency teachers are
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 important for students’ personal growth factors.
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,
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should be spend
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should be spent
 on both computers and tutors as per the necessity of the
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.
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