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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

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Ready-made meals are often seen preferable these days. While some people laud its convenience, I strongly argue that fast
food
 detrimental impacts outweigh its benefits.
First
 of all, it is indisputable that the pace of life is rising significantly, which in turn has altered our lifestyle. People nowadays claim that there is no time for doing household tasks, and
this
 precious time can be exploited in making profits rather than spend it making their meals.
As a result
, they tend to order ready meals due to the lack of spare time.
On the other hand
, despite the facts stated earlier, we have to take a serious look at the danger of consuming fast
food
. Admittedly, fast
food
 companies are found to maximise their income no matter what.
This
 approach, have to lead us to think about the ingredients they use and whether it is safe for us to have
this
food
 as our main meals or not. By way of conclusion, I believe that fast
food
 will continue to become more popular. Giving the health risk associated with
this
 trend, It seems to me that it's everyone's responsibility to raise the awareness between people especially youngsters would be warranted
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