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3. Public celebrations (such as national days, festivals etc) are held in most countries. These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things. Do you agree or disagree?

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The traditional festivals or holidays are celebrated in the vast majority of countries by the government with huge expenses. It is claimed by a group of people that money which is spent for festivals should be invested in more useful things. I disagree with the given statement since I believe that these celebrations are the way of protection of
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country’s cultural heritage
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the country’s cultural heritage
a country’s cultural heritage
 and will lead to stronger relationships of the society.
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 of all, public celebrations remind people the national values of their old cultures. It helps indigenous people to pass their cultural heritage to the
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 generations. It is undeniable that maintaining of traditions of
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country
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the country
 is vitally important to represent it in other foreign countries as each
country
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 have their own worthies and history.
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, national festivals or holidays make a stronger bond between citizens and promote a social solidarity in
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country
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the country
a country
. Needless to say, a stable relationship of people will enable
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country
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the country
countries
 to be more powerful.
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, The Independence Day of Republic is the one of the most necessary celebrations. If all people enthusiastically celebrate it, high inspiration of association would be felt in the
country
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. In conclusion,
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quantity
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the quantity
 of money is spent on public holidays is much
,
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,
it is
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 as beneficial as other useful things. It enables old history and national values of
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country
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the country
 to be preserved and allows local people to be much closer to each other.
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  • national pride
  • unity
  • cultural heritage
  • sense of belonging
  • boost the local economy
  • hospitality and retail sectors
  • showcase
  • global audience
  • foreign relations
  • multifaceted
  • allocating
  • quality of life
  • social inclusion
  • cohesive and inclusive society
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