The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English house.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average  English house.
The graph illustrates the consumer need
of
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electricity
during normal days of both cold and hot seasons in England.
Whereas
, the pie chart is representing the purpose of
electricity
usage
in
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local residents of the same country.
Overall
, most of the
electricity
is used by customers in the
winters
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winter
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.
On the contrary
, it is seen that less amount of energy is consumed in
summers
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. Considering the demand
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electric supply
in
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typical days during the winter season, the graph showing units of used
electricity
surges
40,000
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.
While
on average, 30,000 to about 46,000 units of
electricity
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burnt by users in the same weather.
This
is because of the excess
usage
(exactly 52.5%) of electric heaters, both for rooms and water,
along with
the
usage
of ovens, kettles and washing machines, which accounts for 17.5%. Turning to the trend of the graph in the summers, it is observed that
less
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units (around 10,000 to 20,000) are consumed as compared to
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consumption in cooler weather.
That is
mainly because of the less
usage
of purely resistive load, which usually takes a lot amount of power. Other households,
such
as
,
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lighting, TV, vacuum cleaners, food mixtures and
electricity
tools all
accounts
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30
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% of total consumption.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, usage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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