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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, technologies have helped the spread of
music
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 everywhere, and various applications have been developed to give
everybody
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 the chance to have their favourite playlist always in their pocket. To
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 extent, some people deem by the
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 as a mean to link diverse cultures or ages, while others give a different meaning to it. Personally, I agree with the
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 ones and in
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 essay I will give some food for thoughts. One of the main controversy is that, actually, the
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 kinds have been deeply changed in these decades,
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 the oldest would never appreciate the
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 hits, neither for the style nor for the singers and their way to behave and present themselves on the scene. Just by looking at 20 years ago, the main
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 kind was the pop one and it was part of a culture made of habits and ways of dressing that was completely despised by
the oldest
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the old
. Another major disadvantage is the message that modern
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 brings to people. In details, the so widespread trap
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 deals with graphic contents that would never be shared my adults, while
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 kind is totally embodied by youngs and adolescents.
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, if we considered some masterpieces that have signed the
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 history, for sure, we would find almost
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 agree. What I mean is that some bands that have left a mark in our past, would always be beloved by
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 and would never die or be substituted. Weighting everything up, it is clear that the general idea of
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 as a mean of communication, could really connect generations, since it has been a leitmotiv for ages. Even though, we should not forget that the
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 reflects the actual historical period and
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 some
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 kinds would never be shared by
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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