In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through internet, that they can just as well study at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I tend to disagree with
this
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First
of all
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the major reason why people think that it is not necessary to have traditional schools and teachers is that it is relatively convenient to study online.Students can easily get access to
knowledge
and information
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and take online courses
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no matter when or where.They can just use the search engine like Google
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ask any questions and dozen of pages will be resulted with answers and advices about the questions.The
Internet
contains an endless supply of
knowledge
and information that provides a convenient way for us to assess
knowledge
.
However
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there is no doubt that accomplished teachers cannot be replaced by artificial intelligence.They know how to select constructive and useful materials for the students and teach them in accordance with their aptitude.
Besides
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teachers can talk to the students face to face
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so that students can raise questions and the teachers can immediately figure out and explain to them.
Moreover
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the
Internet
can only provide a large amount of
knowledge
and related data without selection.Unclear explanations in
internet
might lead us to misconception and unintentionally the users would possibly open negative website.My own experience could be a good illustration of
this
case.When I was in a primary
school
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I, without any purpose
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clicked the advertising item which provided adult contents.Seeing that my teacher came fast to close that website.
On the other hand
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it is obvious that the
school
is providing a huge benefit except academic subjects
such
as communication skill, social skill through leadership
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friendship and many others. Those kinds of skills cannot be figured out at home by our own
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which means that the students still need to gain more at
school
rather than through the
internet
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while the additional learning could be deserved out of the
school
.At the same time
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the more about using the
internet
for study may
also
lead to the serious cause, like its influence the low of the health condition of the teenagers.Some pupil may suffer from short-sightedness and may need to wear a pair of spectacles to help them to achieve a better vision.
In addition
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when students go to
school
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they meet their peers and participate in activities that are organized by the schools.It not only improves their communication skills, but
also
their mental ability, which may help them in their future for their career.
For instance
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there is a survey conducted by Cambridge University which found that there are 50 percent more chances of getting a job when students are educated from in comparison to at home through the
internet
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Therefore
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it makes the future bright for students.
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