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Yu have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

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If I have enough
money
 to buy
enormous
Suggestion
an enormous house
the enormous house
house
 or a
business
, I would say that I prefer starting a new
business
. Most of people say that why you prefer a
business
that is
 not a good idea
instead
 of buying huge gorgeous
house
. There are some reasons why I prefer to purchase a new
business
.
First
 of all, if I would buy beautiful apartment that makes me happy,
eventhough
Suggestion
even though
 the
house
 do not
making
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make
money
. Rather than starting a fresh
business
 making a lot
money
 and I will confiscate much
money
 than before that means I multiply my
money
.
Second
 of all, If I have my
oown
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
business
, actually I inherit it for my children. By passing it to my children, they
caan
able to
can
 expand it even better than before. And starting a new
business
 is I have to learn about how to create
successful
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a successful business
successful businesses
business
 that means I accumulate a lot of useful knowledge about marketing,
financial
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finance
, or
money
. To sum up, if you purchase a
house
instead
 of making
business you
Accept comma addition
business, you
 just
live
go away from a place
leave
 a gorgeous
house
,
house
can not
can not
cannot
 make
money
 for you. But you choose the other thing,
business
 give you a lot
money
 and
then
 you can be
buy
Suggestion
buying
 whatever
house
 you want.

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