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Good health is a basic human right. However, in a growing number of coutries today, access to health care depends on socio-economic status. This is discriminatory and should not be the basis for access to good health. To what extent do you agree with the statement? Write an essay of about 350 words to express your opinion. Give reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Good
health
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 is one of the most basic right of human.
Nevertheless
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, in many
countries these
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countries, these
 days, there is discrimination on
health
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 care because of
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 condition. In my perspective, I completely disagree with
this
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.
This
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 status is a serious issue and
this
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 should be rethought. Like safe drinking water and sanitation, nutritious foods, adequate housing, education and safe working conditions,
health
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is
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are
 a fundamental human right and it should have access to all people. It will
also
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 show that everyone is treated equally with respect and dignity
.
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.
 No one should get sick and die just because they are poor, they do not have enough money to be cured or because they cannot access the
health
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 services they need. In some cases, people can easily notice that the treatments, the medicine, the doctor for the poor is entirely different from those for the rich.
For example
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, in some hospitals, several doctors and nurses usually discriminate between the wealthy and the poor. The just cure and take care of the rich, and sometimes they heap insults on the poor. Both the rich and the poor are human so the poor cannot be treated as well as the
wealthy just
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wealthy, just
 because they do not have a lot of money. It can be seen that while the rich stay in a room that has enough modern
equipment
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equipped
 with imported drugs, the poor lie in the hospital corridor, without medicine. Taken everything into consideration, discrimination between the rich and the poor must be stopped as all people have their own right to have access to
healthcare
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health care
.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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