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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school program (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that voluntary work
such
 as
charity
Suggestion
charitable
 activities should be a mandatory part of
high schools' curriculum
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the high schools' curriculum
. While I agree that doing social services does good to students' self-development, I believe students have much more to focus on. On the one hand, it is undeniable that community work provides students with
crucial skills
Suggestion
the crucial skills
 and creates chances for self-evaluating.
For instance
, when a child is to be involved in an environmental friendly campaign in his local area he will developed environment protecting consciousness.
Moreover
, doing social activities means having opportunities to meet new people,
therefore
, will bring about improvement in communication skill and enhance confidence.
On the other hand
, high school students have to struggle with a great deal of homework and exams on many subjects. They hardly have time left for many extra-curriculum activities.
For example
, a gifted high schooler would spend the whole morning and afternoon in class. They even have extra-classes and homework every evening and
may be
by chance
maybe
 during
weekend
Suggestion
the weekend
, so clearly no time is left for community services. Another reason to mention is
unwillingness
Suggestion
the unwillingness
 toward
such
 services. Not all students want to bury themselves in things unnecessary to them. Making social activities a compulsory part of school program means forcing some students
do
Suggestion
to do
 unwanted work,
thus
 resulting in negative thoughts. To conclude, social activities bring benefits to the volunteers
(
Accept space
(
the students) themselves if they do it with happiness and
willingness
Suggestion
willingly
, not by force.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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