Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, everyone aims to have a successful career. While some people believe that to be successful
university
or college
education
is important, others argue it to be unnecessary and
one
should start working after their secondary schooling. I would agree with the former view,
however
, both the sides will be d
icussed.
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discussed
To begin
with, those who believe that joining a
job
s
taright
successive (without a break)
straight
after school is better argue that in higher institutions only t
heorectical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
knowledge is imparted whereas in real life practical knowledge is more important.
For instance
, to become a car mechanic only practical knowledge about how to repair a car is required and
one
gains expertise in skills with experience.
Moreover
, by doing a
job
straight after school
one
can start earning and become self- dependent. In other word they do not need to ask for pocket money, while their counterparts be still be dependent upon their parents.
However
, I strongly b
elive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that
university
education
is i
mprotant.
of great significance or value
important
One
of the b
enefit
Suggestion
benefits
of
university
education
is that an individual learn basics of the major course.
This
narrows down their focus and helps them to gain perfection in their field.
Furthermore
, nowadays it is essential for an individual to a
quire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
university
education
to qualify for a
job
. Many professions
such
as doctor, lawyer require l
icense
Suggestion
a license
which can b
e only gained
Suggestion
be gained only
by appropriate qualification. If the individual h
ave
Suggestion
has
a d
egree
Accept comma addition
degree, then
then
only they can earn a white collar
job
and a good salary. In conclusion,
although
by joining a
job
s
taright
successive (without a break)
straight
after school can make start earning early and self d
ependent but
Accept comma addition
dependent, but
to a
quire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
a good
job
one
needs a good
university
education
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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