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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains the world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far out-weight the disadvantages.

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Nuclear
power
 is an innovation of the modern science. It is the key source of nuclear weapons. Nuclear technology can be used for our benefits as the natural resources are limited and being exhausted every
second
. It can be the most efficient alternative to fuel, electricity, and other types of
energy
. But yet nuclear weapons are a threat to our existence and single misuse of
this
 giant
power
 can destroy our civilisation. Many of the
first
world
 countries have achieved the nuclear
power
 and have become a superpower. It can
initially
 seem that mono-polarization of nuclear
power
 preserves
world
peace but
Accept comma addition
peace, but
 the idea is not
agreeable always
Suggestion
always agreeable
. The present
world
 is not in a position where powerful countries will shout at weaker and the
peace
 will prevail. The reality is we notice lots of suicide bombing attack and the hatred; the wrath of the people is so acute that they won't even think about the existence of our civilisation. To maintain
peace
 there must be a peaceful way. Anger,
Power
 threat and domination can't keep the
peace
 in the worlds. So I disagree with the statement that
nuclear weapon
Suggestion
nuclear weapons
a nuclear weapon
 can maintain the
world
peace
 and far-weight the
disadvantages but
Accept comma addition
disadvantages, but
 I do agree with the idea that nuclear
power
 can be a great source of cheap
energy
. It is very much true that nuclear
power
 is an alternative and perhaps the most efficient source of
energy
 during these days of the
energy
 crisis. Unlike other natural resources
such
 as petroleum or gas
,
Accept space
,
 it is highly effective for industrial, transportation and other purposes and it is pollution free. As it is limitless, there is no question of its being used up like other natural resources like natural gas.
Moreover
, to control the over-increasing environmental pollution we have to use
this
 technology in every applicable field. One day we all will be bound to use nuclear
power
 to continue our life when there won't be any natural gas, fuels at all.

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