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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion?

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Nowadays, the solicitude and parental attention for new generation was decreased and almost all of them spend
they
of them or themselves
their
 inestimable
time
 for social networks
for example
: telegram,
instagram
,
whatsapp
,
facebook
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Facebook
 and others. In course of
time
 the majority of young people was vacillating and more vicious. The assignment of more care for correct upbringing of junior generation and give right direction for them by parents playing extremely relevant part in our life. Because they will have precise objective and aspire to
this
purpose
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purpose, then
then
 they haven't desire for expense of
time
 for worthless engagement
such
 as the communication
in
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between
 Web sites. The Merciful relation of parents for their kid's have 100% repercussion for
appropriate formulation
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the appropriate formulation
 of character. The absence of proper nurture represented terrible aftermath like
perpetration
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perpetrating
 crime by teenagers and so forth. For
salvation
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the salvation
 of
youngers
 from preoccupied aura the parents must will be friend with them, give reliable advice, buy books, helping with centralization and with
regular selection
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the regular selection
regular selections
 of vital way.
In
addition we
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addition, we
 can say about diurnal
regime namely
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regime, namely
 purposefully composed him and we didn't forget
do
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to do
did
 conclusion in the
ending
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end
 of every day. In conclusion all of
young generations
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the younger generations
younger generations
 will know for what they spend their
time
, where they go, whom they will be tomorrow. We must remember that Our future in
hands
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the hands
 of teenagers. If parents will be thoughtful with
correct education
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a correct education
the correct education
 with
elevation
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an elevation
 of self-confidence of child OUR FUTURE WILL BLOSSOM AND GRADUALLY INCREASE
instead
 of
spend
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spending
time
 only for prey money and have not knowledge where go their children what they doing all day, who their friend's.

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