Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. what do you think are the cause of this? what can be done to make flies closer ?

During
this
period of
time
families are less close each
and another
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and, other
and other
than they used to be in the past.
This
essay will examine the main causes of
lose
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losing
approaches and possible solution. The two main causes of
lose
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losing
contact with relatives are distances and overworking. People are in a constant search of happiness and feel secure, having a good house cause sometimes to move
far a way
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far away
faraway
from their relatives.
For instance
, long distances and
time
in a busy life cause not to have enough
time
to visit people who love, because of that many of them just are meeting up during Christmas
time
or New year.
Also
, when people are busy working more hours and spending more
time
in
theirs
of them or themselves
their
job than
theirs
of them or themselves
their
houses, people
star
the beginning of anything
start
missing moments with the family.
technology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
plays a bad role in
this
time
, because most of the parents want to have
time
to relax when they arrive at home so they encourage to use TV, phone or
IPad
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iPad
IP ad
paid
to entertain
theirs
of them or themselves
their
children. Some of the possible
solution
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solutions
are create
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create
are creating
are created
activities online and travel. Nowadays we are in a world where
technology
can close or can separate, in
this
case, we can use the
technology
to create unity among our relatives, doing meetings on a video call once a month, so there is no need to travel so far and spend
time
in a car to see people who we love. Travel helps us to identify the best or the worst of us, when we travel in Family we should spend the all the
time
together, creating moments with each of us. It can be no so far and no really expensive place, one week of camping in a forest without internet, help to connect with their mother earth as well. To conclude, People could have been
closely
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closed
closer
in the past because there was not internet an the
technology
before.
However
, Families are evolving with the upcoming, if we use it good we can be closely than the past.

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