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in some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Imposing a curfew is not considered a general practice. Only in grave situations authorities have to implement
such
 actions. Countries like US, restricting teenagers for going outdoors alone after dark, must have involved some unavoidable reasons. I personally support the idea of putting a ban on youngsters going out without any adult company at the time of curfew particularly. On one hand, coming to a decision to
imposed
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impose
 a curfew brings about various reasons. Situations of lockdown, be it for anyone,
is deemed
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are deemed
 to be in favour of
society
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the society
. Police is there to protect and
safegaurd
make safe
safeguard
 the citizens from any kind of riots and fights. There have been cases in the past where students of tender age indulged in fights and shot their own friends with
gun
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guns
a gun
the gun
. Due to
such
 incidents governments have to interfere in order to maintain law and order by imposing
ban
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a ban
bans
 on certain activities for
sometime
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some time
.
On the other hand
, there have been
much
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many
serious
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more serious
incidents
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incident
 documented in the recent past, where someone involved with a terror group,
rundown
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run down
 the mob with his truck and killed several innocents. Considering these rising terrorist attempts,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 have become extra cautious and take every possible precautionary measures to
safegaurd
make safe
safeguard
 people. Kids have always remained easy targets of criminals and
hence
 to keep them safe and secure, putting restrictions on their going out alone at night is a necessary and important initiative. To conclude, it is
imparative
requiring attention or action
imperative
 to follow the orders set by the state in favour of their citizens. Children are the future and protecting them should not only be a
priority but
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priority, but
 an action forwarded to protecting their right to live.

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