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Some people are happy to stay in the same area for their whole life, while others prefer living in many different places.

Habitancy environment is generally perceived as
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 of the most important aspects of human life. Some
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 are delighted to live in the same area for their entire life whereas, some others want to live in many different places if they have a chance. Both views will be discussed in more detail in the following paragraphs.
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 with, there are many
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 who prefer to reside in
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 area only.
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 is because they do not want to leave their comfort zone as many formalities and arrangements are required if shifting is involved.
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, family's oriented
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 opt to live within joint families because they prefer the proximity of family to better career opportunities.
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, in small cities of Iran, many
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 live in their ancestral homes as they feel blissful residing in them.
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,
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 choose to migrate from
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 area to another as they are keen to learn and acquire knowledge about different cultural aspects and lifestyles.
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, exploring various lands and meeting
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 from different cultural backgrounds is the hobby of many
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. Professionals who lack exciting opportunities in their own country are likely to migrate to places where there is a demand for skilled
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 like them. To sum up, there are merits and demerits to staying in
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place
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 and frequently changing the
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 of residence. In my opinion,
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 who seek newer experiences and challenges and keep moving from
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 to
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 can be more satisfied with themselves in the end.

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