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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrated the
rate
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 of
birth
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 and
death
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 conversion in New Zealand for over 100 years and foresees that until 2101.
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, the
birth
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rate
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 was higher than the
death
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rate
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 at the beginning. Both curves experienced an upward trend and there had some significant rise until the present day.
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, the
death
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rate
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 will be increased sharply and exceeded the
birth
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rate
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at the end
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 of the prediction. In 1901, the starting point of
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birth
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rate
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 was nearly 20000 and remained steady growth until 1941. Between 1941-1961 it experienced a rapid surge to more than a triple, approximately
by
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65000 and hit the highest point over the period. There was some fluctuation in the following 20 years. In comparison, the amount of
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was
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dramatically rose from 2001 to 2061 and outweighs the amount of
birth
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 in 2041, almost 50000. It estimated a gradual
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 to about 60000 at
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, birth, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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