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it is common these days to see celebrities advertising different products. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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The discussion at hand relates to celebrities endorsing different products and its impact on our society. The effect of watching famous individuals promoting goods or services can be considered as both positive and negative on the community. On the one hand, the human beings can be broadly divided into two categories, susceptible and sceptical. A susceptible
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 is the one who is easily influenced, whereas a sceptical individual will not get swayed easily. When it comes to advertisements, former individual is more likely to buy goods/services even tough it is not essential for him. He will only buy it because his favourite actor or sportsman recommending it.
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, the latter will
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 evaluate his needs and requirements before buying anything.
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, the advertisers now a days get smart day by day by using new tools and techniques that can identify likes and dislikes of a
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such
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 as their favourite actors, sportsmen etc. Once a
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 observes his favourite celebrity using a
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product from particular
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product from a particular
 brand they get inclined to buy the
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 from same brand
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 making a
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 more susceptible rather than sceptical. In a nutshell, It is disadvantageous for people if they buy goods/services only by looking at an advertisement and one of their dearest
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person
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people
 endorsing it. A
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 should always evaluate his needs, read or seek review of the
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 from users who have already used it, read about warranty conditions and
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 buy the
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.
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