Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Popularity
Suggestion
The popularity
of online
shoping
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
has been increasing
Suggestion
has increased
rapidly since past few years. People are able to buy almost everything on the Internet, starting from simple things like food, on entertainment ending. While for some, buying on the Internet may have drawbacks, I believe there is more benefits which, in my opinion outweigh disadvantages.
Firstly
, online shopping may have
bad influance
Suggestion
a bad influence
bad influence
on certain people. Internet made shopping even
more easy
Suggestion
easier
and available for everyone. People can buy almost everything without leaving their houses, which may cause both physical and psychological issues
such
us shopping addiction.
Morover
in addition
Moreover
, buying on the Internet
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
leads to social distancing.
For example
, people having problems with communication and socialization stop leaving their
houses even
Accept comma addition
houses, even
for buying groceries, because they can do it online. Despite
this
, there are significant advantages of buying on the Internet. People can buy anything they need or want at any
time
of the day, which is a benefit for those who works late hours or have too many responsibilities. Online shopping
definately save
Suggestion
definitely saves
definitely save
time
, people do not have to drive to the supermarket, neither spend
time
in traffic and lines at shopping malls. Buying on the Internet is for everyone
so even,
Suggestion
, so even
those with health issues can do shopping.
For example
, disable or elderly don't have to ask others for help, they can simply shop online.
For instance
, nowadays a lot of shops exist only on the Internet, so to get their products society needs to buy it online.
Thus
, buying things on the Internet save
time
and
energy but
Accept comma addition
energy, but
also
support online brands. In
conlcusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, there are both benefits and drawback of online shopping.
Although
, it may cause health issues in some people, in my view merits
such
us
time
saving
outweigh
Suggestion
out weigh
downsides.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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