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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The reasons leading the global area degradation are illustrated in the pie chart, which is followed by a table providing a breakdown of data
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 the influence of those causes on three areas of the world, including North America, Europe and Oceania in the 1990s. All figures are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is clear from the first graph that both over-grazing and deforestation were
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 main culprits reducing ground productivity.
As a consequence
, Europe had been affected the most severely
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 soil degradation during the 1990s. Looking at the pie chart, 35% of the total tract
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 degraded by over-grazing, which was followed by 30% deforested. Over-cultivation was
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 responsible for the reduction in quality of 28% of soil,
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 other factors were not
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significant factors.
According to
 data from the table, the proportion of infertile soil in Europe reached nearly a quarter of
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 continent area.
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, the figure in Oceania was nearly
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half;
however
, it was suffering the biggest impact from over-grazing.
In contrast
, only 5%
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 estate made North America became the least affected region
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 areas in the year of 1990s.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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