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s supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
We live in a
such
 era where everything is dominated by advertising. While walking on the street, on the mobile phone, on the television and world wide web ,
w
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,
e see the commercial everywhere,
however
, many people adopt the immoral and unacceptable way to earn the money which is indeed harmful to the society.
To begin
 with, endorsement has become the practice to increase the growth and sale rather than a process to promote the product and spreading the awareness and product's distinctive functions. People are not in the favour of the welfare of the common man the big companies are manipulating the youngsters by launching the big celebrities as a brand ambassador to promote the particular company product and influence the vulnerable public.
In addition
 to that commercial of the tobacco and alcohol has been the debatable issue since now
hence
 government recently banned it. It is quite possible that the consumptions of these products shall increase and negative implications could be seen on people’s health. People who cannot afford the expensive products shown in the commercials will surely accept the unlawful approach or indulged in the bad activities to be the part of the elite class.
On the other hand
, some might argue that commercial advertisements helps the business to grow the sale and make the people aware regarding availability of the products and its functions.
However
, it is true provided publication should not manipulate the naïve people. Conclusively, Many aspects of advertising do appear to be morally wrong and are not acceptable in todays society .
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