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School teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of students than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is argued that school teachers are more accountable for the overall improvement in the
intellectuality
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 and social interaction of children than their mothers and fathers.
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, I personally disagree with
this
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 notion completely because children spend more
time
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 with their parents and the bonding
also
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 stronger with them than with teachers.
To begin
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 with, pupils merely stay limited period in the school compared with the home where they spend most of their
time
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.
Therefore
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, the interaction is more with parents than teachers and
as a result
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, the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and intellect of children are more influenced by their mothers and fathers. For an example, the average
time
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period which
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period, which
 students study in the primary school is less than 5 to 6 hours in Sri Lanka and children
practice most
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practice, most
 of the lessons that they learned in the classroom, at the home with parents.
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, children have more love and affection towards parents than teachers.
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, they have stronger reliance and connection with their mothers and fathers.
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, most of the
time
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, offsprings tend to follow their parents and visualize them as role models
of
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in
 their lives. For an instance, a survey done in the UK has revealed that the majority of adolescents who are victims of drug and alcohol abuse has
atleast
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at least
 either one parent who is affected by habitual drinking or smoking. In conclusion, parents are more responsible for the development of social and intellectual domains of their kids because children consume longer duration
at
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 the home and the mutual reciprocity with parents is stronger than teachers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nuances
  • responsibility
  • intellectual development
  • social development
  • structured learning environment
  • curriculum
  • diverse interactions
  • group activities
  • conflict resolution
  • foundational impact
  • core values
  • beliefs
  • attitudes
  • nurturing
  • joint responsibility
  • collaboration
  • continuous dialogue
  • distinct roles
  • underestimate
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