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Write about a holiday that you went on that was really important to you. Say where you went and what you saw, and explain why it was the best holiday you ever had.

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, on May 1,2010, was memorable and glazed at the corner of memory in my eyes.As it was so enjoyable, I wrote it in my diary of memory.I went to Bandarban which is one of the hill areas in Bangladesh. I did not sleep well before the night of the journey in the light of excitement.I woke up at 6am on that
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 and took a bath
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 dressed up myself and took some clothes.I and some friends of mine made
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 plan to make a tour that was necessary to ours due to get a
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.Now we are going to Bandarban to spend our
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 to make some memory
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 necessary to make rejoice when I will be an old man.We rented a bus
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a luxurious one, by 1000k. When the dusk
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our arrival time, begun
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it was 4pm.Meanwhile
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we took a hotel by 2000 Tk.As all of ours tired
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we slept so early.Hardly were some of my friends woke up at that night in the light of tiredness.After tomorrow morning, we woke up so early and we left our hotel at 7am;
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 took a bus for the trip with a guide whose had worked for money to show the direction of the travellers.He was a nice guy who made us happy.After we spent three days
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we came back to our home town. To sum up briefly
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a holiday
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 which is spent on refreshment.And we did the same thing.That
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 was my birthday.
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I remembered that
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