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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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By the growth of using vehicles in our life, the traffic
problem
 has formed over the years. The crowded cities, especially, have
this
problem
 in recent days,
so
Suggestion
so in this situation,
this
 situation, which is caused by the huge amount of cars, pushes the authorities to take some precautions
such
 as taxes, and to use the incomes from these taxes in public transportation.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits, and the disadvantages of
this
 solution.
Firstly
, it can be said that the heavy taxes make the car owners discourage to use their own cars, because it will be most probably very expensive to drive. But,
on the other hand
,
this
 precaution will push them to use public transport, so
this
 would lead to reduce traffic problems and pollution as well.
In addition
, the income will be the expenditure in improving the transport system, which is a common case that,
for instance
, there are so many old buses and other vehicles in bad circumstances,
thus
 the satisfaction of
community
Suggestion
the community
 will be
in
Suggestion
at
 a high level.
Nevertheless
, there are several disadvantages of
this
 solution.
First
 and foremost, as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 said before,
this
 solution will include heavy taxes on drivers. At present, the taxes are already heavy for them, and making them more heavy will be just much pressure on drivers, who may not have another choice but to drive
everyday
Suggestion
every day
.
Moreover
, the expected decreasing in usages of
car
Suggestion
the car
 will cause a new
problem
 in
economy
Suggestion
the economy
an economy
 of both sectors, automotive and fuel industries. In conclusion, new policy, which is considered to solve the current
problem
, may cause some newly circumstances that should be discussed about the advantages and disadvantages.
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