In order to be successful at a sport, some think you must be physically strong while others believe mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

"Quicker, stronger, higher!" -
this
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This
is a moto of Olimpic Games, but how important is the strength of the
sportsmans
someone who engages in sports
sportsmen
sportsman's
? Someone
believe
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believes
that body power is a key to become a successful in a sport, while others are sure that the mental strength is more important rather than physical. Seems like both opinions
have
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has
the right to exist.
Undoubtedtly
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Undoubtedly
, if a
sportman's
someone who engages in sports
sportsman
body is capable to perform
bigger amount
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the bigger amount
of exercises, run faster or push harder in comparison with competitors, it gives him a boost at the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
of his career.
However
, at the same time it can pay a bad coin to the athlete in a future.
Such
domination from the start could lead to relaxation in his mindset and a lack of a determination during the exercises. That aside leads to the
importancy
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
of a mental strength.
World
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The world
is overfilled with great examples when unpromising
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
at the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
of their sport career have become a world
stars
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star
in a future by
relaying
have confidence or faith in
relying
on their
goaltending
and
hardworking
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hard working
.
This
physical disadvantage at the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
, appeared to be an extra motivation for them and push those infants to
exersise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
harder and spend longer hours on the field or in the gym for a future glory. To put in a nutshell, I pen down that both mental and physical strengths are tremendously important for being a successful athlete.
However
, you might be a less physically strong sportsman than your competitors at the start of a professional
career but
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career, but
still be able to become the greatest one with
required determination
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the required determination
to your goal and
hardwork
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hard work
.
In contrast
, it's almost impossible to conquer the top of the podium without the mental force but having the physical power.
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