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More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. what do you think are the causes of this can you suggest some possible solutions?

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In new lifestyles for people who
work
 become busier and they
work
 harder to earn more
money
 in their life.
people
Suggestion
People
 who need
money
work
 hard and hard. More
stress
 is affected by
work
 pressure.
Although
, the ability to
work
 under high pressure will make employees promote the ability to the best way. Offices for Development and have the best Function
for
Suggestion
in
 society make high pressure on their employees and that changes
work
 patterns and source more
stress
Accept comma addition
stress, therefore
therefore
 people who are
boos
Suggestion
booing
 will be created more
stress
 for themselves and their employees.
next
Suggestion
Next
 problem can be these people do not have enough
time
 for their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
work
 due to their need
money
 Continue living.
In addition
, offices are not the reason for all problems despite they can offer strategies to decrease
stress
 on employees like
make
Suggestion
to make
making
 a place to relax in the workplace or employees have to eat a safe and
good meal
Suggestion
a good meal
 together and have a fun
time
 in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
. These improve their
work
 production
on the other hand
 people should have worked in They specialize in
it they
Accept comma addition
it, they
 can earn
money
 very well and have a good
time
 in their
work
. To conclude, people should allocate their
time
 to
work
 properly, especially when there are so many things to do.
they
Suggestion
They
 should try not to overload themselves because it undoubtedly leads to
stress
.
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