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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are varied views about outfits wearing
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 the workplace. In some companies, it is required to wear elegant clothes, while in the others, it doesn't matter, because bosses rather pay attention to employee's skills. In my opinion, I believe that, it is more relevant how the employees do their job, rather than what they are dressed. On the one hand, physical appearance is important. It is obvious, that people working in a big international corporations should dress smartly.
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, it is a big chance, that well-dressed professionals will have better results on their job, more clients or higher selling.
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, what matters the most these days, is the
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 impression. We all judge people under the cover, so it is likely that potential workers wearing elegant clothes will get the job.
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, the quality of work has significant impact on a company's development. Employers hiring people, due to their skills and experience will gain more success for the business.
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, businessman with 5 years experience is more desired than no experienced but better dressed person.
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, in my view quality of work should be above physical appearance. Nothing will replace good working and well qualified employees. But it should be obvious for everyone to take care of themselves and wear tidily in place of their everyday tasks. In conclusion, there are different views. Some people believe that workers should dress elegant, other focus on quality.
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, the key is to do both, dress
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smart
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