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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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People have different views as to whether tax should be devoted to fast trains connecting cities or
transportation
 public in
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Suggestion
to
se.
Although
 it can be argued that investing in high speed trains between cities is essential, I believe that ameliorating current existing public
transportation
 is more urgent. On the one hand, I agree that new railway lines for fast trains between cities bring a number of benefits. When high-speed trains allow commuters to travel a great distance in a short period, city dwellers have a tendency to move out of city centres to live in the vicinity where houses are more affordable and the environment is fresher.
As a result
, dilemmas of major cities including housing, traffic jams and pollution can be addressed comparatively effectively.
In addition
, tourism in neighbouring cities may benefit from these railway lines because when travelling between cities becomes more convenient, people are likely to spend their weekend travelling and exploring these places
instead
 of staying at home.
On the other hand
, I am of the opinion that public transport should be upgraded before pouring money into high speed trains.
Firstly
, roads need to maintain and enlarging to meet the
transportation
 needs, leading to reduced traffic jams and accidents.
For example
, after the routes between two cities Vinh and Ha Tinh in Vietnam had been repaired, the number of accidents reduced significantly and trade between cities developed more than before.
Secondly
, existing public
transportation
such
 as buses, regular trains should be enhanced
instead
 of constructing new railways. The reason is that
such
 forms of transport may meet sufficient transport needs of the majority of citizens if they are good enough. In conclusion, it seems to me that spending tax improving present-day public
transportation
 is more beneficial than building railways for high speed trains.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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