A lot of people are suffering from loneliness these days. They lack of physical fitness. What do you think are the reason of this problem? Can you think of possible solutions?

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Past few decades have seen a dramatic change in
old
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an old age home
age
home due to lack of communication and lack of closeness among family members. Old people
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
are facing loneliness and
also
they are weak as well as unfit
.
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In
this
following essay I aim to identify some causes of
this
problem
and some viable solutions. The significant reason of the
problem
is
nuclear family
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the nuclear family
a nuclear family
. The trend of living in
nuclear family
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nuclear families
a nuclear family
the nuclear family
is increasing
day
by
day
moderately. People prefer independent life and
can not
can not
cannot
tolerate any kind of
boundation
in their personal matter so they try to maintain distance along theirs grandparents and elder
one
.
Moreover
, Retirement is
also
a reason, after getting
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
people loss
theri
of them or themselves
their
network of friends, they feel lonely and isolate. Somewhere they found
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
as a burden on family because that time they unable to do any work and face financial
problem
.
Furthermore
, with passing
age they
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age, they
not able to talk and listen to someone because of
age
factor and their weak body. No
one
available
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to
look after them in their own family who can give them food on time
.
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They think freedom has been lost and become
overthink
all things
everything
this
cause they suffer from stress and other physical issues. In order to solve
this
problem
, people should have to change their thoughts about nuclear family and they can choose to joint family. Time and attention should be given
.
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They have to keep in mind and never forget that
one
day
will be
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coming
when they
also
face with
same time
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the same time
and
age
.
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Change matters a lot so we should change ourself
first
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first, then
then
stop treating them as a burden and start treating them as a head and most significant member of
family
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the family
In gist, we all are responsible for that because we are adopting
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a film about life in the western United States during the period of exploration and development
Western
western
culture. If it goes on,
then
one
day
we will
also
find themselves in
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old age
home and suffer with
same
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the same problem
problem
.

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