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In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better?

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In the past people used to
work
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 in the one company because it encourages and had profit for retirement;
however
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, a society, presently, lived in turbulent times where every year something changes,
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 people many times change a workplace because of the reduction or other reasons.
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, both of
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 phenomenon have not only the positive impact
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 as predictable the future, refresh environment and new opportunity, but
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 drawbacks because people live in uncertain conditions and occasionally force to choose a position lower than previous.
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, I think, as current labourer, better labour with the same firm because stability today is essentially important.
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, few people can decline the fact that in the past people who worked in the same
place
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 had a professional growth more often than now, and more predictable the future that had a positive impact on their health.
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, in the Soviet Union was encouraged the one workplace by better the retirement, the wage and the growth in the worker specialisation area.
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, companies receive profit too, because had a labourer who deeply knew their responsibility from the perspective of the company specific.
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, today, people who change
work
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 receive a profit on new collectives because it leads to refresh surroundings and broaden knowledge. Notwithstanding, employment in the same
place
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 in the past
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 with the current time has negative side
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 as the routine and a worker should labour in any conditions, even in the worst,
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 especially relevant today.
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, the director of the firm could decline the wage or increased the load without influence on the salary.
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, an employee who do the same every single day eventually feel boring that leads to mistakes and a less interest in the job.
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, a change of working
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 always unpredictable because people go to a new area where necessarily learn new rules, and occasionally because of cannot find the same
place
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 of
work
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 push to lower position, and at the same time companies receive new specialist that can be inept in the company
work
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 area. To conclude, I believe each person independently should decide how they
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,
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, with good conditions of the
work
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, from my perspective, better labour on the same firm.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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