sharing an inspirational story that leaves a deep impression on you.

Today I am happy to share my stories about the person who inspired me in my study and in my life.

That is

my cousin

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his name’s Minh. He once told me, "Success will come to people when they really try and train, even if they don't have the talents. It is you who create success for you. , no matter how many difficulties there are many ways to solve them. Don't be discouraged, don't give up because behind you always have family to support you ". My brother is now a manager. In the past, he had failed his university entrance exam 3 times, but he never gave up, he spent the whole time studying and working as a waiter to pay for his tuition. Thanks to the hard work and effort, he passed the Foreign Trade University with a high score. After graduating, he applied for a job in a foreign company, from a normal employee two years ago, now he is a manager of the company. He really gave me lots of motivation and inspiration to study. In difficult times, I always look to him for advice. He made me realize that what I'm doing really makes sense.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

200 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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sharing an inspirational story that leaves a deep impression on you.

Include an introduction and conclusion

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweight the disadvantages?

Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the workers, but not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

6) Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.