SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT NOW WE CAN SEE FILMS ON OUR PHONES OR TABLIETS, THERE IS NO NEED TO GO TO THE CINEMA. OTHERS SAY THAT TO BE FULLY ENJOYED, FILMS NEED TO BE SEEN IN A CINEMA. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

Although
in the past people was so exited to
going
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go
cinema
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the cinema
and they were waiting for new films, nowadays, a lot of movies
prudct
bring forth or yield
produced
and
mabey
by chance
maybe
you don't find a
time
for watching in
cinema
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the cinema
a cinema
.
Accept space
.
So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that we can see films on our phones or tablet.
First
, today people are so busy, so if they want to go to the
cinema
for all
movives
a form of entertainment that enacts a story by sound and a sequence of images giving the illusion of continuous movement
movies
, it's not real.
but
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But
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of that they can use their died
time
and enjoy with watching movie on their phone or on
tablet
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a tablet
the tablet
tablets
.
for
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For
example, when they want
to going
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to go
to their
job
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jobs
, they can watch a film in the way in
train
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the train
or bus.
beacuse
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Because
Beacuse
we know that we expend a huge
time
in the
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
so
this
is the best
isshue
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issue
for
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of
using and fun.
In addition
,
we can't ignore of
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we can't ignore
the level of
wathing
the act of observing; taking a patient look
watching
waiting
movie
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a movie
in the
cinema
and on
phone
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the phone
.
this
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This
is so clear that
cinema
is
fantastic espitialy
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fantastic, especially
fantastic especially
if you go there with your family or your
frinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
friend
.
Concequently
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Consequently
,
this
is a nice
reson
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
resume
for have relationship with friends and make a nice moment for us.
as
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As
an
example I
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example, I
have a friend who wants
see
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to see
the group just make
appointment
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an appointment
the appointment
appointments
in
cinema
. In conclusion, I believe that
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
we need
going
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to go
to the
cinema
and
enjuy
derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in
enjoy
with
familly
a social unit living together
family
or our friends.
but
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But
as we are so busy
this
times
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time
, we can't go there for all movies.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
it's better that we
orgonize
create (as an entity)
organize
organise
organizer
to use our
deid
engage in
did
dead
time
for watching movie on
phone
Suggestion
the phone
or on our tablet.

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